Can you review my poem?

that is such a good poem..and you are only 13!!! it was great. if i was a very mean critic i would say that it was great but watch out for the rhythm of the poem. as the lines are rather long you must be careful about the rhythm. make sure it sounds right and that there are the right amount of syllables in each line. apart from that tiny thing it is great! i love the suspense and vocabulary you used. the variety of techniques and much more!